Monday Nov. 7 Online Class Assignment

1.       After reviewing the information about the drafting introduction on page 3, review your own intro and decide what you can do to:

a.       more clearly show what is at stake for your issue

• In my introduction, to more clearly show what is at stake I can adress my topic more clearly and elaborate on it.

b.      more thoroughly contextualize your issue with background information (this is helpful for both intro and conclusion)

• I can elaborate more

c.       write a few sentences for a. and b. that you will insert into your next draft.

• A student who is considered an exemplary student, is a student who is outstanding, a student who is an over achiever, who sets goals and accomplish them.

2.       Review your topic sentences of your body paragraphs:

a.       Whether you are doing org. plan 1 or 2, your topic sentences should contain the criteria that you are discussing in the paragraph.  (Review bottom of page 4 and all of page 5). 

b.      If you have any main topic sentences (do at least two here) that don’t contain the criteria of your definition that you are about to discuss in your paragraph, paste the old sentence, then write the revision of it that you will change in your next draft, like this:

                                                               i.      OLD SENTENCE:   YADDA YADDA

                                                             ii.      NEW SENTENCE   YADDA YADDA now with criteria clearly stated so we know what to expect out of this paragraph

                               i.   OLD SENTENCE: An Exemplary student must do great things.

 

                               ii.   NEW SENTENCE: An exemplary student is a student who strives even though they do not understand.

 

                               i.   OLD SENTENCE: .In college we expect to go to school for our major and take only classes that relate to what our future career will look like

 

                               ii.   NEW SENTENCE: In college we expect to go to school for our major and take only classes that relate to what our future career will look like. We must go beyond what is expected, and do bigger things to have a higher chance of getting a job in our career.

                             

3.       Now, go through your body paragraphs and make sure that in the evidence sections of them, you are “developing” the criterion you are discussing, which means: explaining/defining each criterion for your definition.  By the end of your paper, we should be able to tell a) your definitions, b) the criteria for those definitions, and c) the definitions of those criteria. (Look at page 5, description of BP1).

a.       Find your shortest body paragraph.  This is a quick way to determine which one needs more development. 

b.      Paste it in.

c.       Then paste in a revision of it that contains more details and explanations of the criterion under discussion.

•   . A student who has a mastery of writing skills is a student who let the flow of words and thoughts process into one. They understand what they read and write. They write essays to get accepted into grad school, or write to get jobs. They know how to correctly spell words, or how to use grammar.

 

Revised: A student with a mastery of writing skills are the students who are more likely to get the job. They use their common sense as well as other sense to help them understand. They study, as well as reading and writing.

4.       Look over one of your rebuttal areas.  If you have one (and you should; “considering the opposition” or “other viewpoints” is on the rubric) look for a way to revise it to be more developed, if you don’t have one, make one now to add into your next draft.  Review page 6 and the ways that you 1) acknowledge opposition to your argument, 2) but prove how the opposition is not strong enough to invalidate your argument.

a.       Paste in the old and new rebuttal sections

b.      Or say that you hadn’t gotten around to that yet in your first draft and make one up now to include in your next draft.